Tuesday, November 15, 2011

Sentence Deconstruction and Reconstruction

Please post your rewritten sentences here as blog comments and not as blog posts. Great work today! Think about what your classmates are trying to say in each of these sentences. How can you restate these sentences in a manner that is more concise? Do you think it's important to rethink your classmates' tone? Why? Why not?

Here is the list of sentences we read in class.

1. Under situations like these, the author does not realize that his or her information is wrong…instead, he or she believes that whatever he or she is writing is factual and true, for whatever the reason.

2.The major consequences are not only does it take away from traditional dating but we never really know who we are talking to online.

3. Age, gender, sexual orientation, birth place, languages spoken, phone numbers, even area which they are living at.

4.There are definitely much more important things we can be doing besides being noisy and looking at peoples’ pages.

5. However times have changed, technology has advanced and the youth of this generation found a new way to bully by using social networks, cellphones or any other electronic device to harm those they do not like in this generation basic bullying has morphed into cyberbullying but who is at blame and what can we do to stop it.

6. With the incredible use of technology our world today have shape into a more of a message saturated world meaning a world being dominated by technology which is changing the way we communicate by sending, receiving and interpreting messages we encounter every day in our lives.

7. Although visual literacy is a good skill to comprehend, focusing on only the visual will have its backfire.

8. Since many children don't tell anyone about the bullying they experience, it is easy to see some of the negative impact that social media has had on our youth especially.

7 comments:

  1. 4. Spending too much time on social media is taking away from the more important things we can be doing.

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  2. 2. The devaluing of traditional dating and never really knowing who we are conversing with online are major consequences of online dating.

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  3. 1. At times, authors believe that what they write is true, even when its wrong.

    Under certain situations, authors don't realize that their information is wrong because he or she believe that what they write is true.

    Authors write about what they believe in and what he or she thinks is fact without realizing that their information is wrong.

    2. Online dating has many consequences that you don't see with traditional dating since you cant see who you are actually talking to

    The major consequences of online dating is that you may never who you are really talking to unlike traditional dating.

    Traditional dating makes it easier to determine a persons character, oppose to online dating where you can never be too sure.

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  4. Sentence 2
    Taking away from traditional dating is one of the major consequences of online dating. Another, consequence being that we don't know who we're chatting with online.

    Group Ada Lin and Yasmin Mora

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  5. 2. Online dating creates two detrimental consequences: (1) it takes away from the value of traditional dating and (2) prevents one from actually knowing whom she or he is engaging with.

    Group: Elissa G. & Katarina C.

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  6. #2 -
    Online dating is becoming the new traditional dating, though he/she would be clueless on knowing who their significant other maybe and the dangers that may come with.

    Team: Kashmira & Zaid

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  7. #1. At times, authors believe that what they write is true, even when its
    wrong.

    #1. Authors write about what they believe in and what he or she thinks
    is factual without realizing that the information is wrong.

    #1. Under certain situations, authors do not realize that their
    information is wrong because he/she is writing what they believe in

    #2. The major consequence of online dating is that you never know your
    actually talking to online compared to traditional dating.

    ReplyDelete

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